Copy Edit #10

From Discover Magazine blog 80 Beats:

This piece beings with a run-on sentence, giving two examples of what did not happen. It then explains what did, but without anything to signal the change of flow. While a more dramatic shift might be called for, I chose a minimally invasive way to distance the second sentence from the first by reusing his first name.

Original:

He wasn’t late to the airport, he didn’t get lost in the terminal. He never made it into the terminal because he wouldn’t partake in either a whole body scan or a physical pat-down of his genitals.

Corrected:

He wasn’t late to the airport, and he didn’t get lost in the terminal. John never made it into the terminal because he wouldn’t partake in either a whole body scan or a physical pat-down of his genitals.

Copy Edit #9

From IGN TV:

An organization, Brownmark Films, is a singular entity treated as if it were plural:

Original:

The Reporter also notes that Brownmark are seeking a permanent injunction and maximum statutory damages.

Corrected:

The Reporter also notes that Brownmark is seeking a permanent injunction and maximum statutory damages.

Copy Edit #8

From Houston Press Blogs:

Here, the author curiously uses semicolons instead of commas. I understand why he wanted more of a break; each clause is quite lengthy. Still, it seems inappropriate.

Original:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects; can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants; and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.

Corrected:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects, can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants, and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.

Copy Edit #7

From VentureBeat:

While no error was made, the repetition of the word "album" is less than graceful:

Original:

Songs from all 13 Beatles albums are available for purchase individually or by album.

Corrected:

Songs from all 13 Beatles LPs are available for purchase individually or by album.

Copy Edit #6

From ActionTrip:

Use of single quotes around software title instead of double quotes.

Original:

'Understone Quest Pack' expands world of Albion with a new area and three new quests.

Corrected:

"Understone Quest Pack" expands world of Albion with a new area and three new quests.

Copy Edit #5

From blog Project 52:

This short story is riddled with improper punctuation.

Original:

I gazed at the lush green mountainside through the little window, beautiful.
“I’m sorry.” He said.

Corrected:

I gazed at the lush green mountainside through the little window: beautiful.
“I’m sorry,” he said.

Copy Edit #4

From Riverfront Times:

Once again, we find double quotes within double quotes.

Original:

"What they term "luxury cuisine" belies the truth behind an industry that exists to exploit wild animals.

Corrected:

"What they term 'luxury cuisine' belies the truth behind an industry that exists to exploit wild animals.