Copy Edit #10

From Discover Magazine blog 80 Beats:

This piece beings with a run-on sentence, giving two examples of what did not happen. It then explains what did, but without anything to signal the change of flow. While a more dramatic shift might be called for, I chose a minimally invasive way to distance the second sentence from the first by reusing his first name.

Original:

He wasn’t late to the airport, he didn’t get lost in the terminal. He never made it into the terminal because he wouldn’t partake in either a whole body scan or a physical pat-down of his genitals.

Corrected:

He wasn’t late to the airport, and he didn’t get lost in the terminal. John never made it into the terminal because he wouldn’t partake in either a whole body scan or a physical pat-down of his genitals.

Copy Edit #9

From IGN TV:

An organization, Brownmark Films, is a singular entity treated as if it were plural:

Original:

The Reporter also notes that Brownmark are seeking a permanent injunction and maximum statutory damages.

Corrected:

The Reporter also notes that Brownmark is seeking a permanent injunction and maximum statutory damages.

Copy Edit #8

From Houston Press Blogs:

Here, the author curiously uses semicolons instead of commas. I understand why he wanted more of a break; each clause is quite lengthy. Still, it seems inappropriate.

Original:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects; can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants; and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.

Corrected:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects, can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants, and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.

Copy Edit #7

From VentureBeat:

While no error was made, the repetition of the word "album" is less than graceful:

Original:

Songs from all 13 Beatles albums are available for purchase individually or by album.

Corrected:

Songs from all 13 Beatles LPs are available for purchase individually or by album.

Copy Edit #6

From ActionTrip:

Use of single quotes around software title instead of double quotes.

Original:

'Understone Quest Pack' expands world of Albion with a new area and three new quests.

Corrected:

"Understone Quest Pack" expands world of Albion with a new area and three new quests.

Copy Edit #5

From blog Project 52:

This short story is riddled with improper punctuation.

Original:

I gazed at the lush green mountainside through the little window, beautiful.
“I’m sorry.” He said.

Corrected:

I gazed at the lush green mountainside through the little window: beautiful.
“I’m sorry,” he said.

Copy Edit #4

From Riverfront Times:

Once again, we find double quotes within double quotes.

Original:

"What they term "luxury cuisine" belies the truth behind an industry that exists to exploit wild animals.

Corrected:

"What they term 'luxury cuisine' belies the truth behind an industry that exists to exploit wild animals.

Copy Edit #3

From Action Trip:

This sentence is missing an article:

Original:

SEGA of America announced March 15, 2011 as worldwide release date for Shogun 2: Total War.

Corrected:

SEGA of America announced March 15, 2011 as the worldwide release date for Shogun 2: Total War.

Copy Edit #2

From DailyTech.Org:

Here, the use of double quotes within double quotes makes this paragraph very confusing. The use of single quotes should be used instead. The quoted sentence is also a run-on, though that is not the fault of DailyTech. Still, they could correct this.

Original:

GoogleMobile blog writes: "In addition to existing, popular features like local availability, fast barcode scanning and voice search, version 1.3 includes new search filters like “price” and “brand” to help users refine their searches to find the perfect product."

Corrected:

GoogleMobile blog writes: "In addition to [...] popular features like local availability, fast barcode scanning and voice search, version 1.3 includes new search filters like 'price' and 'brand' to help users refine their searches to find the perfect product."

Copy Edit #1

From Physorg:

Now while certain liberties are often taken with headlines, a colon is no way to attribute a quote. This is also a headline, but is uncapitalized.

Original:

Diabetes drug may have killed 500 in France: authorities

Corrected:

Diabetics Drug May Have Killed 500 In France, Authorities Claim.

Word #10

Word: Draconian

Location: TGDaily.com Tech Entertainment News

Context: Skyfire bypasses Apple’s draconian Flash ban

Definition:
-adjective
draconian
1.Excessively harsh; severe.

Use: Iran's draconian punishments have brought harsh criticism from foreign press.

Word #9

Word: Incipient

Location: PR-USA.net News Release

Context: Blackmore defines the development of green technologies in our region and worldwide, as incipient.

Definition:
-adjective
1.Beginning to exist or appear.

Use: John always checked his skin for incipient signs of cancer.

Word #8

Word: Surreptitious

Location: PRLeap.com article

Context: This humorous t shirt encourages Twitter addicts to own up to their surreptitious tweeting habits.

Definition:
-adjective
1.Done, made, or gotten by stealth.
2.Acting with or marked by stealth.

Use: Jon's light, surreptitious footsteps did not wake his wife.

Word #7

Word: Irrupt

Location: Suite101.com article

Context: Bird irruptions are the focus of inquiry and research for ornithologists.

Definition:
-intransitive verb
1.To burst in forcibly or suddenly; to intrude.
2.(Ecology) To increase rapidly in number.

Use: The Starship Enterprise was briefly hampered by an irruption of Tribbles.

Word #6

Word: Apologia

Location: Atlanta Journal-Constitution Editorial Blog

Context: Bush’s apologia offers little new

Usage:
-noun
1.A formal defense or justification, especially of one's opinions, position, or actions.

Use: John never expected that an apologia based on Twinkie consumption would excuse him from murder, yet it did.

Word #5

Word: Errant

Locaton: Latimes.com

Context: L.A. ‘mystery missile’ may have been errant launch, experts say.

Definition:
-adjective
1.Wandering; roving, especially in search of adventure.
2.Deviating from an appointed course; straying.
3.Straying from the proper standards (as of truth or propriety).
4.Moving aimlessly or irregularly; as, an errant breeze.

Usage: John stepped off the trail, taking a more errant path in search of sights unseen.

Word #4

Word: Deign

Location: Facebook user description

Context: Harvard practically beat a path to His door and prostrated themselves before Him, begging that He deign to consider an international relations degree.

Definition:
-intransitive verb
1.To think worthy; to condescend -- followed by an infinitive.
2.To condescend to give or bestow; to stoop to furnish; to grant.

Use: I approached Beck with some reverence and he deigned to grant me an autograph.

Word #3

Word: Chicanery

Location: Suite101.com article about Celebrity Psychic John Edward

Context: In his book, Crossing Over, Edward tries to minimize the fact that Dateline caught his chicanery.

Definiton:
-noun
1.The use of trickery or sophistry to deceive (as in matters of law).
2.A trick; a subterfuge

Use: President Bush used chicanery to gain the public support required to invade Iraq.

Word #2

Word: Ramshackle

Location: NYTimes.com

Context: At least 64 people died in the collapse of a ramshackle building.

Definition:
-adjective
1.appearing ready to collapse : rickety
2.carelessly or loosely constructed (a ramshackle plot)

Use: John's ramshackle plan to rob the bank without a mask or weapon proved disastrous.

Word #1

Word: Deleterious

Location: Online Forum

Context: I do take great issue with fundamentalist religious extremism and the deleterious effects of lingering puritanism in the US in general.

Definition:
–adjective
1.injurious to health: deleterious gases.
2.harmful; injurious: deleterious influences

Use: John consumes deleterious quantities of alcohol.