Copy Edit #8

From Houston Press Blogs:

Here, the author curiously uses semicolons instead of commas. I understand why he wanted more of a break; each clause is quite lengthy. Still, it seems inappropriate.

Original:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects; can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants; and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.

Corrected:

So the U.S. Federal Drug Administration does nothing to monitor the financial conflicts of interest of researchers who run clinical trials on human test subjects, can't adequately inspect foreign manufacturing plants, and has allowed eggs and peanuts to become lethal fricking weapons.